Originally Posted by Deej56
Dan,

I'm a big fan of your songs . . . From a production standpoint, this one is brilliant . . . everything I would expect from you. The vocaloid works well (though seems to lack just a bit of "gravity" that the song perhaps needs). So while there is so much that is beautiful about this production, I have to be honest and say I struggled with the song as whole a bit.

The first two verses are just killer . . . the melody, feel and arrangement are engaging. But for me the song loses energy, atmosphere and engagement on the third verse beginning with "Jesus came to break" . . . and perhaps my very subjective reaction to it is augmented by a lyric in those two verses that I didn't quite follow (though I recognize others may very much have a better understanding of it). Which is to say, this song may very well resonate with many of the faith, but unlike many of your other songs, it loses me (the unfaithful, LOL) a bit. And that should probably disqualify me and my feedback . . . but I offer it nonetheless. Personally, I kind of would have liked to see where this song went if you stayed in the same vibe of those opening two verses.

I hope all is well in your world.

Deej
Deej...I REALLY appreciate your comments...I won't be long here except to say that the first part of the song and the third part make no sense to me (doctrinally or theologically) without the the middle section....the middle defines the WHY? for the crucifixion and the third part is the WHAT DO I DO WITH IT? section... at least this is my take on the whole thing...the variance of the keys and melodies is to make sure the three acts are seen as three different parts of the one gracious act...dying with Christ (to sin) is an essential part of God's plan (i.e. the gospel)...I've rewritten that section many times (even since your comments)...clarity is my goal but I may not have achieved it...thanks again for your comments...best regards Dan

Last edited by firesong; 06/06/24 12:08 PM.
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