I would greatly appreciate suggestions / advise regarding how to optimize this project.

The audio is a first cut in production. I am questioning the "arrangement" of the tracks. Does it need more/less to make it tell the story? I am also questioning the "originality" of the song. The chords are a generic minor progession, but does the melody sound too familar (do you recognize the inspiration)??

Good (free grin) production direction at this stage in the project would be a great help to me.
Thanks

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