Originally Posted by dcuny
I like the intro - it hints at a jazzy song. But it ends up not going there, so it seems out of place

Ya, I like the jazzy intro also. And I agree with you but...This brings in my specific taste so I do want to keep it.

Originally Posted by dcuny
[*]There is too much slapback on the vocal.
Vocal processing is a work in process and is tuning mentioned by rharv. I will fix this.

Originally Posted by dcuny
The "oohs" fight against the vocals, but sounds fine when there's no vocal.

I agree I will bring this in and out.
Originally Posted by dcuny
When the violin comes in, it starts feeling awfully close to another song. At 1:59, things click for me, and... yes, it sounds too close to the inspiration

So my vocal brings out the original melody? One reason I have kept the vocals sparse. I can tell you the violin is playing the "original inspiration" midi. While the piano is me noddling on the keys. I will start by eliminating the violin midi and see where that takes me.

Originally Posted by dcuny
[*]The piano parts feel disconnected from the feel of song.

In fact first piano is the left hand only of the original inspiration. So it covers all the chords rhythm nicely and holds down the bass but does not expose the melody. Then there in also my piano playing what I am trying to play to redirect the melody. I will work more on this.

Originally Posted by dcuny
I don't think it's copyright infringing, but I find it distracting whenever I'm listening to a song and it reminds me of another song. On that basis, I'd try to remove the similarity.

Removing the Violin part will help with this.

Thank you so much. This input early in the process is extremely helpful.
Dan

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