James, I like this cut down version better.
On thing though is that there are a lot of sibilance. You may want to get a De-esser plug-in if you don't already have one. Here is a list of free ones:

https://www.bestfreeplugins.com/plugins/effects/de-esser-01.php

Note that I have no experience with any of these.


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