I like the lyrics and the "change the way that you dream" theme. Criticisms are difficult as so often it comes down to taste, but maybe adding some more harmony vocals might have filled the song out a little. Also even short musical interludes need a solo instrument. Once I have an idea for a song or instrumental I always start by searching my 'favourites' in BiaB for the rhythm section instruments I envisage - I very rarely have to check for other styles - but I probably spend more time searching for solos as the more experience I've gained I tend to collect at least 50 samples so I can find the very best to fit. We all have our own ways of working, but I only use BiaB for independent instrument samples and due to the dire lack of space in my retirement flat - there's lots of noise pollution, too - I'm limited to Audacity for everything else. I look forward to seeing how you progress as you'll definitely get better and better.

Some favourite Waoist Adages:
#1: Play on the Way.
#13: Ask not for whom the flower blooms, it blooms for you.
#58: Bring consciousness to it.
#63: On the road to effortlessness, effort must be made.
#92: Be Love Now, the rest will come on its own.