Originally Posted by Ezekiel's Storm
First of all, that piano makes the song "pop," as the modern saying goes. It feels part of the song and not part of the song at the same time. I like it.
Your vocal sounds fine. It's on key, and that's all I ask for. Although, it seems a little buried. The abrupt ending is cool with those little drop off notes. Bass line is primo.
"The windows still need cleaning
I can't see through the pane." that was pretty darn clever!
Thank you Scott,
I tried to litter the lyric with time based cultural references and similes/metaphors just to keep me interested.

Cheers
rayc
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