Hi John,
Thanks for listening and taking a lot of trouble to comment - it is good to have your comments.

It is not a personal story John - I simply imagined the situation.

Yes I know what you mean about the distorted guitar coming in during the second verse - the reason I put it in was to suggest a certain anger. I could use strings as you suggest but that would provide a different mood.

I take your point about the vocals - I did get close to the mic for this one since I was attempting a sad voice lol.

I like the lyrics - each line provides more information and more sadness and tells more than it says. Yes the dog line was a bit crammed in as you say - need to work on that.

I take your point about bluesy notes not appropriate.

Yes natural drums I think would be better

Thanks again for your very useful comments

Jim