Nice one Bob. This does well purely as an instrumental, although it's still a bit under written- more of an idea in progress it seems. Myself, I'm always careful about commiting to instrumentals when I write. I almost always latch onto loving it just the way it is and often times, it needs quite a rework to work well with vocal. And the melody most times must change a bit to accomodate vocal phrasing. So when I make a wonderful instrumental, I stick to it with that intention only. And that doesn't often happen because I don't typically write that way. I almost always write the hook first, both lyrically and melody/music. If I have a killer hook, I know I have song. Verses and bridge come easily if I have that killer hook. It is very rare that I write an entire story from top to bottom and then try to portion it all out. That just doesn't work for me. But I'll tell you one thing though- if I'm given a story premise, I can write very easily. It's amazing how we all approach writing. I've read and tried so many different techniques over the years. Many of them work well to keep the writing flowing regardless, but the best work comes quick and from literally out of nowhere- following no prescribed techniques. And in the end, no particular way is the ONLY way every time, either!

Nice one here Bob! You write great material. Someday I'd love to have a crack at singing a take down. I love hearing other people sing my work. And there's even times...ok, only once...that I prefered someone elses performance over mine! LOL! But if you ever have something you want to toss out for fun, I'm game! Take care.

Dan

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