I love the concept of this song, the lyrics, and your voice. The melody strains under the load of the lyrics, that's the best way I can describe it. I'm not sure how to tell you to fix that. It's just a songwriting skill that I'm sure you will get in time. Try to rewrite it so the melody and lyrics flow together. Again, it's potentially a great song, just need to get it to flow better. It's worth a redo, IMHO.


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