Thanks Robert for taking the time to listen and offering your appraisal.
I am well aware of the importance that you place on lyrics so your opinion carries extra weight and I thank you for it.

"The melody strains under the load of the lyrics"

I could not decide what to leave on the cutting room floor so I crammed them all in with the result that the song resembles an overcrowded apartment.

"It's just a songwriting skill that I'm sure you will get in time."

Yep, live and learn.

Great to see and hear you back on the forum .