The phrasing is fine with us. It sounds like the way you might phrase it with your voice.
And that means nothing negative ... just that it has a bit of the spoken word vibe.

So ... good job with the synth. Mellow and smooth.

Nice pleading love story also.

The mix sounds good on the monitors.

Well done,

J&B


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