Ok, David, so ... firstly, THANKS for listening and immensely so for that incredibly detailed and huge amount of feedback smile I really appreciate it, more than you can imagine, perhaps.

Yes, I was trying to set up a strong contrast between verse and chorus. I'm not sure it was haphazard smile As for avant-garde ... I really don't think so - as the fabulous composer and songwriter that you are, you KNOW what real avant-garde sounds like, right? This is NOT Stockhausen, thankfully smile smile smile

I thought hard about eliminating that middle section instrumental. In the end, I kept it, but how important it is to have kept it is a matter of debate, I agree.

I fail to see the contradiction in "the world will stop to spin". It's spinning now, last time I checked wink ... so, in the eventuality that it "will stop to spin" (which was the meaning of the lyrics) ... etc . I don't see the contradiction, but maybe that's just me? smile

"Taking the cup" refers to dying, of course. So "when our lives are up / I will gladly take that cup" means that "I will take the plunge" and "fly with you into the aether". So yes, the rhyme is convoluted, perhaps, but it does make sense?

Toni Braxton goes down to a low D, below middle C, in "Unbreak My Heart". Here, I go to the F, a third above that note, below middle C - so, surely, a reasonable singer can sing that note, in view of the above, and it's hopefully NOT too low? smile

The melody does go up (from the F onwards) on "fly with you into the aether", but it starts low, like any flight starts ... from land upwards ...

I like your detailed feedbacks, so I do take them with a certain, hefty amount of seriousness - but, as you can see, I still do my own thing if I think it's important, so ... smile - but, honestly, THANK YOU for taking the time and effort to write so detailed about this little ditty of mine!!!

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