David, great to see/hear you back. First, and most important, rhyming "can't believe" and "make believe" is perfectly fine in my freewheeling rhyming dictionary. So no ticket from me. smile

It's certainly an ambitious composition, and very well crafted, and it sounds GREAT with a lot of interesting movement and clarity. (Did I use the word "and" enough in the previous sentence? Yes, I think I did.) I still found it a challenging listen for some of the reasons you list in your post, but am sure it would sound better with repeat listens. Will do that for sure.

I'm with you on the struggle between making a song "better" and moving on. Sometimes you just have to stick a fork in it. Sometimes...over and over again. smile


DC Ron
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