David, always fascinated by your work, esp the vocal/BGVs..you've created a thick, lush audio texture that is so interesting. I esp like all of your side notes, very helpful!! In listening, most of my ear was tuned into the vocals, so I'd say that any reservations you have about the instrumental backing are nits that went largely unnoticed. Regarding the "rhyming" issue, I'm really strict on that, but I think that "can't believe" and "make believe" would be accepted by most traditionalists, kind of like "show more" and "know more" would be OK. My only issue is the ending doesn't really meet the standards that the rest of the track set up. Maybe instead of what you have, make an accapela final 2-bar phrase--after all, the vocal ensemble is the gem of this, so why not finish it off with a vocal flourish? Thanks for posting!

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