Really good…some specific comments:
1) if that’s a synthesized voice, I’m astounded..not sure how you did that, but it sounds perfect for this track!
2) really tight lyrics with beautiful rhyme schemes and exquisite handling of syllables to get just the right movement..no unnatural emphasis or “shoe-horning” of rhymes to make them work
3) the one lyric area that I think needs work is the one about the boat and the fence—I wonder if you can come up with a stronger idea there—this seemed not as clear and evident as the others
4) musically, excellent
Thanks for sharing!


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