Hi Asom2me.

This is a nice sound. As Andrew said, the heavy rock backing might not be the best choice, but there's no major problem with that.

There are a number of lines where the vocalist isn't singing the correct words. For example, at 0:59 the lyrics say:

Silver seagull flies and little sailboat floats

which is a lovely lyric.

But then the vocals go too high to be intelligible, and there are prosody issues (emphasis on the "wrong" syllable"), which makes it impossible to figure out the lyrics.

And that's really too bad, because again, you've got some lovely lyrics.

I don't know that it's worth the effort to go back and change anything, because with the subtitles it's understandable, and the melody is good. Just be aware that because of the the prosody and pitch, it can be quite difficult to make out the lyrics.

Still, a nice song. smile

-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?