Originally Posted by Guitarhacker
You have a volume drop there at the end of V3 (2:25) that makes it sound like it's fading to the end.... then it jumps back in. I'd recommend no volume drop.

The bass part in the first bridge fit well. In the second bridge it wasn't the same and seemed to lack direction and support for the music. It came back to the groove on the next verse.
Thanks Herb! My logic was that as I had two bridges, I wanted to create some variation in the song, and so came up with the different bass lines. Once I had that, I needed to find some way into it, so faded and applied the reverse cymbals. While (for me) I felt it worked, I recognise I’d already been listening to it for X hours and needed something different. However, to take your point as a first time listener, the second bridge was too stark/different. Something to keep in mind for future - what will the listener expect? I do recognise that I am well along the ‘surprise spectrum’ and don’t mind something unexpected which is why I will often break out of the diatonic, but best not stray too far.

Thank you that in overall context you liked the song. I think I’ll settle with the notion that the song is a nice bit of imperfection.

Andrew D

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