I'll reply to everyone, this time, instead of taking it one by one (as I usually do smile ):

First of all, thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment. I genuinely appreciate it all, regardless of whether you loved the song, or think it needs work smile

The one issue that seems to have come up here is that I used this strong rock backing tracks. The reason I used them is that Shakespeare is basically showing off, in this Sonnet. He is literally saying that HIS rhyme is greater than marble, than the gilded monuments of princes, and that nothing will knock it down, unlike said monuments, statues, etc. . And the reason he's showing off is that he is using the rhyme to immortalise his lover, and the lover's memory, in it. He is literally saying: because I'm such a great poet, I'm using my rhyme to immortalise you, and - because of the greatness of my rhyme, YOU will be immortal.

I didn't (and still don't) think that this kind of statement warrants a "soft" backing track. Maybe rock is too much, haha, but I genuinely see a "Tougher Than The Rest", Bruce Springsteen-like vibe, here. So that's basically what I tried to achieve ... a hard-hitting love song smile

IMPORTANTLY: I have, however, changed the soloist from Eleanor Forte to Asterian II in the song, because (on reflection) I feel that he brings out my vision better. I will listen further, to see what needs fixing, and take heed of your other suggestions ... but, for now at least, the hard rock stays, for the reasons given above smile

Thank you, thank you once to more to each and every one of you. You push me to become a better songwriter. And I certainly often prefer criticism to undiluted praise smile - because, with criticism, one can improve. Mind you, praise, if genuine (which it always is, on this amazing forum) is also welcome, haha. So, in short: THANK YOU. I will work on the song, see if I can improve anything, and will now listen to some of YOUR songs smile

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