I really like this…BUT..your attempt at making it an English song takes away from its potential. The pronunciation and word emphases are awkward, and there are other issues that lead me to think that if you wrote lyrics 8n your native language, and had the synth singers sing them, it would come off more natural and smooth—it has a lovely melody line and very nice dynamics. I would encourage you to render it in your native language and then provide a running English translation. Posting songs in a foreign language isn’t a problem here, and I think the result would be something that makes your already high quality arrangement even better!

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