Originally Posted by BYOBand
Hi Izzy,

I really like this. The progression is interesting; I especially like the bridge (or what I guess is the bridge). The lyrics, however fictional, certainly tap into a commonly felt experience and the 'fading against my will' says a lot. It's got a nice build but I can imagine (and in fact was hoping to feel) this developing into even more of a dramatic piece with more instrumentation and harmonies. It's already a good song (good bones so to speak) but I sense a greater potential...or maybe just a different potential.

Huge thanks, Beth! I'm glad you enjoyed the song and that the lyrics resonated with you - I was hoping to tap into that universal feeling of 'fading against my will' (aka adulting). I completely agree with you about the potential for more drama and instrumentation - I've been thinking of adding more layers, but I'm also a bit afraid of over-accessorizing and ending up with a musical equivalent of a Christmas tree that's more tinsel than tree. You've given me some great food for thought, though, and I'll definitely consider adding more harmonies and instrumentation to see if I can turn this into a full-blown epic without losing the essence of the song. Thanks again for your thoughtful feedback - it's invaluable to get insights from someone with a great ear for music!
best to you
Izzy