Rather than bombard this thread with replies to responses, I thought I'd summarise ...
Melody, chord progression, arrangementExcellent song with a great melody.
… another very deftly crafted pop gem. The melody and vocals are fun and infectious, as is your arrangement.
… this is a super pop song. I liked the arrangement and chord progression … Great mix … A flashback to the late 1960's
Bouncy and fun! … As others have said, a nice bit of pop. smile
I love great melodies and grew up in the 60s when melody flourished. I saw a video recently that I try to keep in mind – using intervals of a 3rd or higher in the melody can create distinctiveness, and avoid too much scale step movement, although this has its place. Some of you might have heard me say that I like straying outside the diatonic when it comes to chord progressions – the verse progression has somewhat strange movements (Cdim7 > C; C > Bb2 > E >Ab/G# > Am) which seem to work to my ear – unless I’ve been listening too long. I need to unpack the progression to understand why it works because, in the natural, I wouldn ‘t have thought it would work.
Vocals… I really like the mix and way you sing it as well. Very nice!
Your playing and singing fit perfectly with the song and the mood you're setting for the listener.
… The vocal is nice but also a bit ropey in parts...doubling might help even that out.
… I especially like the background vocals.
Ah my vocal – my Achilles heel! I do triple track the main vocal but have 2nd and 3rd sitting lower in volume, so maybe I need to mix that a bit higher. Regarding backing vocals, they are my ‘cloaking device’ – something I add to distract the listener from the ‘ropiness’. Regarding lyrics, my view is they are just the vehicle for the music (otherwise, go read poetry) and so I don’t mind if they are oblique or easily misconstrued.
OtherFun song though the last line of the chorus is odd. Like the Dedicated Follower of Fashion quote too.
Well spotted! A day or two into writing the song, I realised that passage sounded familiar (the tail end of the 3rd line of each verse - small things every day / that's not the case at all / expressions all the time) – what was it? The next day, my neurons fired and I realised the melody is the same and the chord progression like The Kinks ‘Dedicated follower of fashion’ – which I used to sing in a band – so I left it in as a nod to the great Ray Davies.
Thank you so much for all your comments! This forum is a very encouraging community where members are willing to pass on their expertise and insights – thank you for welcoming me in!
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