David, I listened carefully, then read the commentary…wow! What a lot of work you put into it! Glad you stuck with it to completion. I have two thoughts: one is that the chord structure is complex (you could have written it with a more simplified chart, but I see that your goal was to explore some more esoteric changes) and therefore the vocal harmonies are tricky—I think at some small points COULD be smoother, but, again, they work with the approach you were after. Secondly, I think a good ending would be, after the stop, to reprise the theme without vocals, then fade it out—that’s what I would do. As always, so much to absorb, learn, take away from your work. Enjoyed it thoroughly!!

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