You have a couple of really good lines in this as several folks have pointed out.

Your songs always create a movie with the imagery in the lyrics. There's nothing more one can ask of a song.

You can find my music at:
www.herbhartley.com
Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.