Originally Posted by Tano Music
Really liked this project…groove was excellent, instrumentation ++…very catchy title/hook!
Two comments:
1) I think there are places as the end of segments where it would more effective to have a hold, like on the phrase “without a home”..I’d hold there, then kick back into the next segment…creates kind of a spacing
2) there are a couple of lyric words that sound a little awkward, like flap-PING…maybe just change how you sing it or find an alternative that’s smoother..when it happens right at the top of the song I think it puts the listener on guard in the wrong way to see “how is he going to make THAT smooth out?”
Great work! Those long bathroom visits are worth it, no matter what she says about it!!
Thanks Tom!
1. Good idea!
2. I had a gut feeling that word wasn’t best - should’ve been more attuned to it.
Andrew


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Andrew D
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