Hi Bob,

This is brilliant. It's classic country at its very best. Moreover, the speed with which you assembled this song is breathtaking! Never in my wildest dreams could I imagine doing this. There's no doubting, you are an amazing talent!

My favorite rhyme in the whole song is "soothe me"/"comsumed me" although I'm pretty partial to "drinking/thinking" too. To be honest, my feeling is that it's that drinking/thinking rhyme, set right up at the top of the song, that does a whole heap to create the "classic country" tone of the lyrics. I have a couple of lyric thoughts. Please keep in mind that these thoughts are simply my own personal taste and absolutely no criticism of your work is intended. First: if these were my lyrics, I'd remove "The" that stands in front of "wine and liquor" in verses 1, 2 and 4. That is, I'd begin the 3rd line of each of these verses with simply "Wine and liquor". To my way of thinking, this will strengthen the title and potentially also enhance its meaning. I'd leave "But" in verse 3. Second: there seems to be a number mismatch. Since the song's subject is "wine and liquor", my thoughts are that line 4, verse 1 should say "But now they only make me blue" and that line 3, verse 2 should be ".. have consumed me". As I said, though, just thoughts on my part and you've probably already considered and disregarded these options.

The production sound that you managed to obtain in this song is awesome. It's EXACTLY right. I don't know that it would be possible to get a better fit. Every song you present here in the forums continues to raise the bar for all of us. It's terrific that you're around.

All the best,
Noel


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