Hi, Pete.

Excellent write, nice production. Everything fits nicely.

Tom's lyric suggestion sounds good to me. When in doubt, you can try RhymeZone:

https://www.rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=too&typeofrhyme=perfect&org1=syl&org2=l&org3=y

Some suggestions, not necessarily any better:

   where the water ran true
   in that place we knew
   of a dried up slough
   cutting us in two
   it's just a bill come due
   so we just make do
   no matter what we do


No need to apologize for "pretentious" lyrics when they work. And they work here very well. smile

Sunu is scary good with country style vocals.


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?