Originally Posted by B.D.Thomas
I'm not an expert in this genre (I'm from the same side of the big pond as you), but I think your song is pretty good.
I would probably speed it up a couple of BPM, but I already like it the way it is now.

Thank you buddy, yes I agree it could be a tad quicker.
Originally Posted by WaoBand
That's a really nice production for a demo, plus it's an excellent c&w song and vocal considering you're a Brit.

Originally Posted by WaoBand
That's a really nice production for a demo, plus it's an excellent c&w song and vocal considering you're a Brit.

Thank you, much appreciated 👍

Originally Posted by Andrew Dee
Hi Pete!
Not my listening genre and never heard any Waylon Jennings that I know of, but this has a good feel to it and good quality. You are good at your craft. I particularly like the 'zing' - that the last two lines of the chorus bring.

Regarding lyrics, IMHO, I don't think you've got it wrong. Being outside the US affords some objectivity.
Originally Posted by PeteMcN
...Now Im a Brit so have probably got it wrong lol
I wondered if you were from US but now living in the UK - have I understood correctly? Some bread crumbs are 'dues', truck, tires, paycheck. This would account for why you are writing country songs and not those in the style of Stones/Oasis/Blur. smirk
Andrew

Hi Andrew, thanks pal I appreciate your comment.

My grammar is in need of a kick up the addressee as I forgot to put an , after the word now! I am indeed a Brit, was born and bred in the land of the Gods, Scotland......🏴󠁧󠁢󠁳󠁣󠁴󠁿

Originally Posted by Tano Music
Something I really liked is the "economy" of your verse's melody phrases--no unnecessary notes...kind of staccato, but very effective. Also the stops in the bridge--great design. And I liked how, in the chorus, you extended beyond the 4 lines that you'd expect and added "The American dream" lines--very expertly done! One thing I'd do differently--that ending "sounds" like what BIAB likes to create--too predictable to those of us who know BIAB very well--I'd prefer maybe to fade out, just to make the ending my own---but that's my taste.
Great work. You should spend more time in the truck!!

Thank you buddy, appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment. Totally agree on the ending, a fade out will be on the finished/. Mastered track, and as for spending MORE time in the truck, please don't let my boss see that remark, the pay is crap as it is and I don't see enough of my wife and daughter lol ( they may well disagree with that last statement!!)


Thank you all

Pete

Sometimes you just have to say f### it and do it anyway!

Proud Scotsman 🏴󠁧󠁢󠁳󠁣󠁴󠁿 now residing in England