I think it's a sweet song, Asom, and I like the chorus, but I think there should have been more verses and a chorus after the musical break.

I agree with B.D. "… if you want more feedback on your songs, it helps to comment on other members' songs. That's what the forum is for."


Some favourite Waoist Adages:
#1: Play on the Way.
#13: Ask not for whom the flower blooms, it blooms for you.
#58: Bring consciousness to it.
#63: On the road to effortlessness, effort must be made.
#92: Be Love Now, the rest will come on its own.