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Hi Greg,

I agree with Michee's comments that some of the lyrics seemed rushed. Also, in going from verse 1 into the chorus, I was momentarily confused because I needed to switch positions with what "I" meant (the girl's speaking in the verse and the singer's thinking in the chorus). I couldn't help thinking that it would have helped me if there was something in the lyrics to prepare me like in verse 2 where "I had to yell..." clarified the chorus. These are just ideas that I jotted down as I was listening. Please use them if they're useful or toss them in the trash if they are not

Overall, I like this song. It was a great listen. I'm impressed that it only took you two weeks to get together. When I write songs, I usually spend a lot longer than that. I wish that I could do it a bit quicker!

Regards,
Noel



Well I just finished re-doing the verse vocals. I think they're better now, (still not completely sure about the first verse ) I also changed the line going into the first chorus as Noel suggested, it now sets up better for the switch to the chorus (point of view )

If you can... have another listen & let know what you think.

Thanks again everybody,

Greg

Last edited by Achordocaster; 09/22/10 09:32 PM.