Hi Ed

I tend to agree with reducing the number of "little" words as Scott suggested - there are a couple of places where they are not needed at the start of lines.

A suggestion for the closing because once you're a sailor, you're always a sailor, the desire never goes, right? I wouldn't know - I'm not a sailor - but I feel that way about my Timmy's coffee.
Quote:

I'll return to my family and do what they please
And hope they don't notice I've picked up a disease



How about:
I'll return to my family and do what they please
But never be rid of this sailing disease.

Sounds like an interesting project you olde salt.


Ian
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