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안녕하세요?
이 노래는 군에서 전역한 초가을 어느날 Bus 주차장에서 사람을 기다리는중 지나치는 Bus를 보면서 만든 노래입니다

더운 날씨에 창고를 정리하다 보니 잊고 있었던 마이크가 있어 용기를 내서 녹음을 했습니다
노래를 불러본게 근 10년 이상은 되었는데 역시 제가 듣기에도 부담스럽네요
어떤 의견이나 노래 부르기, 편곡등 음악에 대한 어떠한 도움도 감사 드립니다.
아래 노래는 신디사이저V 로 사용한 영어 Version 입니다
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Hello?
This song was written one early fall day after I was discharged from the military,
while waiting for someone in the bus parking lot and watching a bus pass by.

While I was organizing my storage room on a hot day, I found a microphone I'd forgotten about,
so I mustered up the courage to record. It's been over 10 years since I last sang, but even I find it difficult to listen to.
Any help with the music, whether it be comments, singing, arranging, etc. is greatly appreciated.
The song below is the English version using the synthesizer V.
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지나치는 차장 밖에 투영된 그림자. 나지막한 나의 음성- 안녕이라 하지 마
치쳐 버린 기억 속에 남겨진 내 모습. 밝은 슬픔으로 남아- 안녕이라 하지 마
바람 불어오는 찬거리엔 고개 숙인 네온뿐. 돌아서진 않겠어요- 그대 떠난다지만
사랑해 그대만을- 잊혀지진 않을 거예요. 사랑해 그대만을- 잊혀지진 않을 거예요

Outside the window passing is a reflected shadow. My little little voice- Oh- Please don't say goodbye
Inside the weary memories is my silhouette left alone. With bright sorrow my dear- Oh- Please don't say goodbye
On a windy cold street are only (only) drooping neon lights I will never turn around- Even though you leave
I love you (so) only you- You will never be forgotten.I love you (so) only you- You will never be forgotten
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Original Release : 1988
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1. Lyrics : aSoM
2. Compose : aSoM
3. Arrange : aSoM
4. English Subtitles : Falconzero
5. Genre : Ballad
6. Instruments : Band in a Box
7. Sing a Song : Synthesizer V Pro
8. Mixing : Cubase Pro 11, MixPad


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Great work...I really liked the Korean version, with you voice, much more than the Synth V English version. Having done dual-language work I can say that only in very rare situations can you make the lyric work word-for-word in the other language. To get a good result you sometimes have to start with the idea, then re-mold the words so that they fit, make sense, and lay correctly against the melody.

Here's an example from your song:
Your "hook" line ends in "You will never be forgotten", but I think a better line--with the same sense--would be "And so I'll never forget you" or "That's why I'll never forget you".

In contrast, your original-language song sounded so nature and smooth, and the english subtitles helps the english listener to understand.. Plus, your voice sounded perfectly fine, maybe too much effect on it.

I would encourage you to:
1) Always post the original language version, with your vocal (or, if it's too difficult, maybe a Synth in Korean?)
2) Keep including the English subtitles
3) Think about maybe working with an English-speaking lyricist who can create a smooth, singable lyric in English that preserves your intent.

Excellent composition, and great post!


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This is a lovely song, arrangement and production. I actually prefer the version with you singing, the vocals could be louder. As others know I'm not a fan of SynthV.


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Hi Asom!
I agree with Tom and Chay - your original Korean version sounds much more natural in terms of singing, and hearing your voice elevates this song well above the standard of your other songs. I am a firm believer in songwriters using their own voice, no matter how flawed they think it might be, or how bashful they are. I think your singing voice is fine - probably preferring it mixed central rather than to the left - but very authentic nonetheless.
Love the sax throughout the song.
Andrew
PS It’s good to see you contributing to comments in other threads - you have a rich songwriting history and would have a lot of insights I would think.

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