Hi Tom,

The melody is fine, the idea and lyrics are good. The band feels a wee dated in sound (ah, it's the midi...midi can make or break it). I'd pare it back, IMHO. I don't mind the vibes and shaker within the body and even at the end. Maybe it's the blend of everything...not sure. I'm not as techy as some others here. Anyway, hope that is helpful.