Really enjoyed this...that intro was quite cool! I read your reaction to the "crowded lyric" comments before I listened, so I was prepared for it. I wonder if, in a song built this way, if the busy melody line in the lyric is maybe an unexpected element that the listener reacts to, like "why is he crowding all those words/notes in there?"--before hearing the entire song. If you were asking for a brainstorming suggestion on what to do about it (I realize that you're NOT asking that), I would suggest how about telegraphing the "busy lyric line" idea before the vocal starts--like a brief statement of the melody line with a guitar, to kind of set up the listener for what's coming. Anyway, I'm not really suggesting any change, just thinking out loud about how/why your song might get that comment. It's so professionally produced, with great performances, and a real nice lyric. I"m always inspired by such high-level work as this! Glad I spend the time to listen in!


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