Originally Posted by Tano Music
Really enjoyed this...that intro was quite cool! I read your reaction to the "crowded lyric" comments before I listened, so I was prepared for it. I wonder if, in a song built this way, if the busy melody line in the lyric is maybe an unexpected element that the listener reacts to, like "why is he crowding all those words/notes in there?"--before hearing the entire song. If you were asking for a brainstorming suggestion on what to do about it (I realize that you're NOT asking that), I would suggest how about telegraphing the "busy lyric line" idea before the vocal starts--like a brief statement of the melody line with a guitar, to kind of set up the listener for what's coming. Anyway, I'm not really suggesting any change, just thinking out loud about how/why your song might get that comment. It's so professionally produced, with great performances, and a real nice lyric. I"m always inspired by such high-level work as this! Glad I spend the time to listen in!

Tano Music, thanks so much for taking time to listen and comment like you have here! Good points are made in your assessment and are taken to heart! I think I'm probably done with this for now though and I am ready to move on to something else! TB

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