Rob,

One Hellava Write!
Wow.

That would be enough said. Damn Good.

But...

Love your vocals.
You should always sing your own songs. So much character. (We need more of that these days.)

Nice backing. Stays outta the way. Good mix. Vocals are very clear (they could be a dB lower volume-wise)
(A piano version of this would be nice, too)

I've had a few words, like "orphanage" that I felt "stuck out". Sometimes you just gotta live with it.
I don't think this one is a problem, though. Hardly a bump.
You could use "from" instead of "at" - that "softens" it slightly. Then sing "ORFnage" to really own it.


I like your title (says the guy who write "1972").
You could repeat that line "Money it goes quickly...In 1959" as a tag after that last chorus. To shore up the title
Could change that up a bit, too, if need be... "Life moves on. Slowly....in 1959"

But...you needn't change a thing. This is Excellent.
Excellent Excellent Excellent

fj