Hi David,

Well, I'm impressed with everything you did to create this song. What a story!
And then I listened to your song four times. Not to even begin to appreciate your efforts, but because there's so much going on in the song, that I like.
The mandolin really stood out sonically!
The vocals were very good, although I agree with Janne (and others) that more differentiation in the vocals (lead and backing) could have been more exciting.
And since you're such a whiz at working with AI vocals, you could easily have tried that ;-)

And by the way, a nice rhyme for "Fire" could have been "Desire." Bob Dylan knows all about that...

Hans


Hans Berkhout
(Birchwood)
https://soundcloud.com/user-296497130