Wow, I have not been keeping up with the rabbits (a reference to one of Mario's songs about the forum). I can devote some time today to catch up. I've been working... and working on my first waltz which I share with you now. I was inspired by the words of a Sufi master, Mansur al-Hallaj, so I can't take credit for the beauty in the lyrics. I'm mostly happy with it though I am unsure if:

the plucky fiddle is too loud?
the pitch-altered male voice is too artificial? (of course it is!)
UPDATE: My ex was around today, so I asked him if he'd record his voice, so the version now on Soundcloud includes his voice matched to my pitched altered-voice. An interesting and improved sound, I hope!
UPDATE ON THE UPDATE: I made some more changes... this time extending the song and separating the two main vocal lines for clarity. I also tweaked some of the instrumentation.
if I overused the rests...although the point was to evoke a moment of eternity (lol...that's one of those oxymorons!)

As akeays...moves fingers back to right place on keyboard...as always, thanks for your listens and comments if so moved to do so.

Eternity on Soundcloud

Style is _SKIM.STY (Skim Pop Piano Waltz)

RealTracks in style: 1189:Bass, Electric, HardRockWaltz Ev 140
RealTracks in style: 3671:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm NewAgeFastWaltzArpSync Ev 150
RealTracks in style: 898:Guitar, 12-String Acoustic, Strumming FolkRockWaltz Ev 150
RealDrums in style:PopRockWaltzEv,SideStickHat,Ride: a: Sidestick. HiHat b: PopRockWaltzEv,SideStickHat,Ride

Added:
RT4194:Guzheng, Background GentleSwing sw 110
RT2328:Shakuhachi, Synth, Background NewAge Ev 110
RT3146:Fiddle, 5-string, Background FolkWaltzChopsAndy Ev 18

Main Vocal: dynamics, reverb, doubled, vocal rider
BGVs: dynamics, reverb, echo chorus, pitch change, enhancement, vocal rider
Feat. Stuart Davies on the talky bits!

LYRICS:

Somewhere between the name and the named
lies a distance that only the Truth can reveal
The leaves of the trees did rustle and tremble
revealing your face in the warm summer breeze
My body, a tingle, my heart opened wide
as I disappeared into the sky

absorbed in the sea in the depths of eternity
eternity

Everywhere you are, our eyes are upon you
And somehow we’re unseeing, unseeing, blind
I saw the Lord with the eyes of my heart
and I disappeared into eternity

Your name is on my lips, your image in my eyes,
your memory is in my heart.

inspired by the words of Mansur al-Hallaj

Last edited by BYOBand; 10/11/25 08:59 AM.