Russ,

Never much liked the original to be honest.

This is pretty faithful to the original, as I remember it.

Sometimes sounds like you’re struggling just a little bit up there.
It may be pitched a little high for you

At least you’ve done away with one annoying feature of the original – the upwards intonation on the “I can help” line.

The false ending is well done..got me thinking of other songs with false endings.

Any suggestions anyone