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"you're talking about the melody of the last chorus- I see"
Actually no. I'm only talking about the melody of the bridge. Specifically the last line of the bridge. I think everything else is fine.
And I didn't mind the wait on the hook either. grin.
I think songwriters are like a big group out fishing and when one gets a hook everybody in the boat gets excited and starts yelling reel it in! grin.
There's also the old joke about the songwriter who hears their song on the radio and says you know I could've wrote that line better. LOL.
Keep up the great work.
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Sounds like a keeper to me, Dan! I can't even think up any constructive criticism!
Thank you Pat! I'd like to go back to this opinion now. My poor song is taking a beating, even from me! LOL!
Kidding!
Dan
that ol' Cindy Crawford's STILL got a mole!
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Josie- I meant to say the last melody line of the bridge, not the chorus. I get what you're saying too.
Dan
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Dan,Ive just taken a second listen to this song and in my humble opinion I dont think you need to alter anything(see previous post).As a Brit I would love to write country songs like this but I think you have to live it and listening to just this track proves my point.Thanks for the listen Cheers Frankie
Last edited by tributeman; 10/07/10 11:53 AM.
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Thanks Frankie. I very rarely leave a project without feeling I could have done something a little better. This one is no different. But there's always the next one and the opportunity to reach that perfection we all try for. I really do believe that because it's nearly impossible to achieve, it's the motivation to keep us learning and reaching for it.
Thanks for all your comments on this one everyone. On to the next one!
Dan
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Oh I do love this song. Everything is so good. I must confess to being a "words" man and I love your lyrics on this. "There’s something about today that’s different" - great opener - gets the listener hooked right from the off. And I love wordplay and a little double twist to lines, so the "Maybe this time, it’s love I’m fallin in" really works for me. Oh and I hate you for being able to get such a great sound. If I can get mine to sound anything close to what to achieve I'll be very happy. Great job sir!
Music is what feelings sound like.
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Thank you! Yes, there are a number of targets you have to hit when it comes to country writing specifically. The first line of the song MUST be very strong. It's a challenge considering so much has been written so very well already. When I heard the song I hope you dance, I almost gave up any hope of writing a worthy lyric again. It just doesn't get any better than that lyric. It was frightening, as a writer. But, there's lots of ways of spinning things and saying things. And the opening lyric is a very important target to hit a bullseye with. Thank you for noticing! LOL!
As for mixing, like anything else- time, practice, patience, and repetition is where it's at. Thanks for your kind words.
Dan
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