Originally Posted by Noel96
… It's good hear a singer singing in Australian smile I felt right at home.
Hi Noel! Now that’s a compliment! It’s taken me 60 years to shed my Brit accent and it still comes through from time-to-time. There’s been some references in this forum to The Kinks, Bowie and … I forget. I’ll need to check to see if I have any Adelaide-isms in there, like ‘dance’ or ‘chance’ with broad "a" sound (e.g., /ɑː/) as in "father". Edit: there is! Verse 1 ‘demand’ Verse 2 ‘chance’.
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… What a great song. I love the way you have drafted the lyrics. Because there is no obvious rhymes until the last line of each verse—go/know, away/play, talk/walk—the lyric content sounds like someone speaking and telling a story. I found this very, very effective. It mesmerised me. This lyric technique fitted the style and presentation of the song perfectly. As Tano said, "the last line of the verse had a nice dual-rhyme that seemed to satisfy the listening ear for that rhyme...nice effect!" I wholeheartedly agree.
I was aware of the double-rhymes that Tom referred to, but I did not consciously write without rhymes in the first lines of the verses - pure fluke. I did want each verse to be around the desire for something simple. Other than that, because I am nearly always a ‘music first’ writer, I have to fit words to an existing melody, or modify the melody, and will often sing it and play guitar to find a natural cadence.
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… Here in Melbourne at 11:30 am on a grey, overcast and somewhat cold November Saturday, your music was a perfect companion. You brought memories of me sitting in front of an open fire, warming my feet, sipping a glass of red wine and contemplating life.
I'm a fan of what you've done!
--Noel
I know - what happened to Spring? But, I don’t mind winter. I am glad my song took you to a favourite spot. Thank you for listening and your wonderful comments.
Andrew

Last edited by Andrew Dee; 11/08/25 03:10 AM.
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