Originally Posted by Tano Music
Laurent: very engaging track! I really enjoyed the melody and chord structure. I think using Maj7 chords in any rock track catches the attention--pleasantly unexpected.
Regarding the lyric, I really wish you had written/sung in French. The English sentiment is excellent, but the emphasis on the wrong syllables, esp at the end of lines, is awkward to the listening ear. I wonder if, done in your native language, it would come off as smoother and more natural--this song is worth the effort to do just that! I think the essence of the SynthV voices were good, but the pronounciation is the problem.
Otherwise, high-quality work, and it gave me some inspirational ideas for future work.

For me, it's better to write the lyrics first and then adapt the notes; I think it's more harmonious. Secondly, the vocal range: on this track, it was a bit wide, and only Kevin could sing it, but it wasn't very good in the lower register and seemed better in the middle or higher ranges. Thirdly, writing songs in English when you're French is sometimes problematic because you miss pronunciations or sentence structures. We'll try to improve, and that's what criticism is for.
Laurent