I was trying to think of what this reminded me of..... I don't know.


Here's the advice I have, for what it's worth.

Good lyrics. Workable melody and structure.

Loose the cowbell. It's totally out of character with the song.

This mix and especially the vocals are lacking in the high end. There's no crispness to the sound and there needs to be. That makes this whole thing sound dull and lacking dynamics. Fixing the EQ would go a long ways towards bringing this to a higher level, musically speaking.

You can find my music at:
www.herbhartley.com
Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.