I gotta say this is easily the best thing I've heard from you and I'd certainly rate it higher than a B- So affecting, so true to its time period. I'm really impressed with what you've done here. The only thing I'd do is rewrite the line "You and me married summer '53" due to ambiguity. You never mention a female in the body of the lyric, so it confused me. Not a big deal, this is one of my favorites by anyone on the forum of late. (Also "raised" should be "razed") EDIT: My first listen was on Soundcloud. Then I watched the video and the line about marriage made a lot more sense.

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