Originally Posted by vicarn
Hi Marty.
Great sound on the bass and overall mix.
Good hook too.

Maybe a little rewrite needed in the verses, as they seem to be similar in meaning and "took flight and flew" are two words meaning the same thing.
Also if most of them took flight, we wonder what happened to the ones who didn't? Are they still there? confused
Please don't hate me. Just my opinion to hopefully improve what has the makings of a good song.

Vic
Vic, i'd love to watch movies or TV shows with you. We'd find all the things that don't make sense (and there sure are a lot of them). i call them "Sunglasses on Jesus" moments. That's great that you picked up the vim and vigor of "took flight" and "flew." Look up the word "vim" and the only definition is "vigor," and vice versa. But that's the way the guy in the story talks. He used his redundancy for emphasis. hehe Yes, "most" flew, but they all took flight by one means or another. Thanks, Vic. Your comments are always much appreciated and always welcome.


Enjoy whatever happens!
marty

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