Welcome, Fjane.
This has a pretty sound. Good vocal..

My suggestions, for what they're worth:
1. The line, "I never even had a chance to take one last look in your eyes, "
sounds rushed because of the spaces you leave between "chance and to" and "last and look".
Cut one of those spaces would improve that flow.

2. The picking guitar could be reduced in vol. by 2 to 3db when you are singing as it's a little overriding there.

3. After the line "Time can be unkind, (but), you live on inside", the song loses it's continuity so my suggestion is to go straight in with a repeat of the last chorus:
"Yesterday you went away and it was no surprise etc."
Then repeat the last line of that chorus as you already have done but just twice more instead of three times with a slight change in melody for each one.
Imo, that would keep the song glued together.

It's a keeper.
Vic