The good news is the bad news coulda been worse. I really like that line. And perhaps that line is appropriate here.

There's a lot of little things that keeps this one out of your normal top 10 high standards that you guys generally show up with.
I won't go into the details here because that tends to be taken the wrong way in this forum at times. I'll just say, at least for me, there's some work that could be done that would make this a lot better.

If you're curious what I'm hearing..... PM me. The obvious one is the guitar string glitch at 0:40 that should have been edited out.

You have a good song in the making. Call it a work in progress and fix the issues.

You can find my music at:
www.herbhartley.com
Add nothing that adds nothing to the music.
You can make excuses or you can make progress but not both.

The magic you are looking for is in the work you are avoiding.