Hi Scott!
I like the Eurodance style used here, and it fits really well with the chord movement - I think I heard I - III - IV - iv progression in the chorus. While I’m familiar with the expression ‘tickety-boo’, I wasn’t quite sure what the context was, so I asked Copilot for its interpretation, which summarised is ‘If you’re going to judge me, please do it fairly’. Not sure if that was YOUR meaning, but it’s probably something I would hope for. In saying that, I love the imagery you have used and the oblique way of getting your message across.

Those BVs - very good - with some Queen stylings in some parts. As well as Bob’s suggestions, I’d throw Pet Shop Boys in there as well - particularly in the intro and verse 1. I love that very dark middle section!

Very creative!

Andrew