Marc,

Electronic music is an interesting concept.. the sounds are so infinitely variable that you can ALMOST introduce all the required sonic interest by swapping patches and introducing different instruments. Unfortunately, unless the song itself has a shape, it can come across as writing a book with the same character in every role, but wearing different clothes. It seems to me that you've dressed each part of the song in different patches, but the underlying entity remains the same for the whole song.

For example, I can't identify a B part where the song branches to a coda, bridge, or any other part that is structurally different than the rest. It gives the impression (to my ears) that the song has an AAAAA structure.

Having said that, I don't see that as being a deal killer. Electronic music is often used more for mood than anything else, and it is not uncommon for it to take the form of an extended loop. But, the addition of a B and/or C part would dramatically enhance the work as composition in my estimation (whatever questionable value my opinion might hold).

I speak as an impartial 3rd party, listening through the filters of my own preference. I can only speak for what I like, not for what has intrinsic quality. I expect that you, as creative controller of the project, know exactly what you set out to accomplish and did what you wanted. The main advantage of hearing other people's thoughts isn't so much to learn how to do better as it is to gain an awareness of how other people judge music. Whether you agree with or act on my statement or not is totally your call. I'm not trying to persuade you of anything, I'm just expressing an observation.

Anyway, you are a talented guy. I really like the way you developed the sound. You clearly have musical sensibilities and know how to to use them to make your music sound interesting.

https://www.dropbox.com/sh/ey71h8ep047758h/AAC12jNM0Hz9Q8zsh5iDeqNHa?dl=0