Everything important sounds great! Solid production, good story development, catchy tune, smooth key change, interesting change of instruments - very well done!

Under the "nitpick" category: On the chorus, have you considered shortening "I was on the outside" to "On the outside"? To my highly delicate ears it sounds a bit like you're shoehorning the words in to fit. It doesn't have the same effect in the verse. I realize that "I was" makes the line more personal, but since you've already said "I was" several times in the verse, I don't think it'll do that much damage.


-- David Cuny
My virtual singer development blog

Vocal control, you say. Never heard of it. Is that some kind of ProTools thing?