Nice job Marty. Very nice job on the guitar hooks. It was your last song we got to talking about musical hooks right? You took that and ran with it. Very well executed on this one. It's always a winner to incorporate something of the lyrical melody into the musical hook, and this is a fine example of how effective that can be. It's that detail that elevates a song above just a biab track. It's really impossible to do it with RT's with that kind of detail, so if you play an instrument and you can do it, it's worth doing. I have been able to get a musical hook done with only RT's, but it takes some heavy editing and you really have to hand over control of the notes to what you have and then find something that works. Not easy. I've been letting RT's lead the way and it's worked out. But every track demands something different.

As to the lyric line 'I was on the outside', I think overall you made the better choice staying with that. In general, it's a tense thing and mostly you're refering to the past, so it works- I WAS on the outside. There may be a couple of spots where you can get away with just 'on the outside', and that kind of thing is worth serious consideration too. Saying it both ways breaks up any repetition that may arise, as well as being crafty too. But overall, it works and is not a deal breaker. Great job on this one. You're really hitting on all 8 lately. Keep riding that wave Marty. Bang every one out you can. That muse is like a wave that ebbs and flows, in my experience. So ride it hard and then if there's a cool down period, enjoy that break too! But so far, you're proving to be an endless well. Good for you!

Dan

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